Comments on: Fiction Friday 2 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/ General musings and fun. Fri, 24 Jul 2009 12:51:05 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: Not been writing much « Sittin’ on ma mammy’s knee http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-31 Not been writing much « Sittin’ on ma mammy’s knee Mon, 25 May 2009 15:27:53 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-31 [...] weeks. But the good news is that I have been working on the plot of a novel that was inspired by the story about Robbie and the thugs. The plot is growing arms and legs and twists and turns as my imagination runs riot with it. I did [...] [...] weeks. But the good news is that I have been working on the plot of a novel that was inspired by the story about Robbie and the thugs. The plot is growing arms and legs and twists and turns as my imagination runs riot with it. I did [...]

]]> By: Martyn http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-28 Martyn Sun, 17 May 2009 16:40:15 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-28 I have to agree with Paul on this one, the reality would be very harsh language but you don't need it for the story, you set the scene and tone very well to do without it. Go on your self big man. Look forward to reading the next one. I have to agree with Paul on this one, the reality would be very harsh language but you don’t need it for the story, you set the scene and tone very well to do without it.

Go on your self big man. Look forward to reading the next one.

]]> By: Paul http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-21 Paul Tue, 05 May 2009 10:24:34 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-21 Yes, if this were happening in real life the language probably would have been harsher, but to be honest you don't notice that in the story - I think you struck just the right balance between reality and not causing gratuitous offence. I can easily see this scene playing out in the streets of my hometown, and in the less reputable corners of Auld Reekie. Had me wincing when the blade cut into his cheek, even though I was expecting it - poor Robbie, he should have known better than to say "I don't have a scar"! Yes, if this were happening in real life the language probably would have been harsher, but to be honest you don’t notice that in the story – I think you struck just the right balance between reality and not causing gratuitous offence.

I can easily see this scene playing out in the streets of my hometown, and in the less reputable corners of Auld Reekie.

Had me wincing when the blade cut into his cheek, even though I was expecting it – poor Robbie, he should have known better than to say “I don’t have a scar”!

]]> By: Annie Evett http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-20 Annie Evett Mon, 04 May 2009 14:43:01 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-20 wow thanks - that was great - really enjoyed that. your use of dialogue set the tempo and carried the frantic pace perfectly. mine can be found http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2009/05/beginning.html wow thanks – that was great – really enjoyed that. your use of dialogue set the tempo and carried the frantic pace perfectly.

mine can be found

http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2009/05/beginning.html

]]> By: William http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-18 William Sun, 03 May 2009 19:48:51 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-18 I could really visualize the scene here. Definitely a frightening moment for Robbie. The scene finishes with the reader wanting to know more, which is good, in my opinion. Well done! I could really visualize the scene here. Definitely a frightening moment for Robbie. The scene finishes with the reader wanting to know more, which is good, in my opinion. Well done!

]]> By: Arial http://almckillop.wordpress.com/2009/05/01/fiction-friday-2/#comment-17 Arial Sat, 02 May 2009 20:46:40 +0000 http://almckillop.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-17 Ouch! I'm ready to kick their butts big time! Good job on this. Yes, realistic because most people wouldn't know what to do when confronted with such violence in their face. Robbie reacted, as far as I'm concerned, with realism. Nice work! That's my two pence... Arial ;) Ouch! I’m ready to kick their butts big time! Good job on this. Yes, realistic because most people wouldn’t know what to do when confronted with such violence in their face. Robbie reacted, as far as I’m concerned, with realism. Nice work!

That’s my two pence…

Arial ;)

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